标题: The Road Not Taken(by:Robert Frost) [打印本页] 作者: 齐云 时间: 2012-5-26 22:19 标题: The Road Not Taken(by:Robert Frost)
Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
And sorry I could not travel both
And be one traveler, long I stood
And looked down one as far as I could
To where it bent in the undergrowth;
Then took the other, as just as fair,
And having perhaps the better claim,
Because it was grassy and wanted wear;
Though as for that the passing there
Had worn them really about the same.
And both that morning equally lay
In leaves no step had trodden black.
Oh, I kept the first for another day!
Yet knowing how way leads on to way,
I doubted if I should ever come back..
I shall be telling this with a sigh
Somewhere ages and ages hence:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I—
I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference.
译后记：
1、这是弗洛斯特最有名的作品，译者众多，在网上搜了一下，把一些名家之译放在楼下，以供比较，其中顾子欣译进了初中一年级语文课（最不能原谅顾译最后一句的处理，破坏了全诗象征的统一）。
2、格律体新诗理论是翻译西方格律诗的利器。我的翻译若有进步，概因其他译者没有掌握新诗格律理论。一是韵脚，原作abaab，韵脚要是都翻译不出来，可以PASS了；二是音步，原作音步多为4步和5步（不知道是不是特殊的格律），翻译时采用四步，为突出原诗沉思的基调和韵脚的特点，每节一、三、四行用九字四步，二、五行用八字四步，句式略作收缩；三是平仄调理，除了少数行，都调理了平仄，以求朗诵声音和谐（逐明老师要是有兴趣，可替我修改平仄不顺之处），译诗的第三节声韵我最满意；四是遵循孙逐明老师大顿对称的理论要求，大顿都落在行中四字或五字处。
3、本诗翻译的难点是第二节。第一个难点是 “as just as fair”到底是什么意思，一些译作干脆略过不译，我以为fair双关，既有公平合理又有美丽之意，以前者为主，但这个双关翻译不出来；第二个难点是第二节最后两行，原作这两行不好，用语松垮，意思含糊，对这两行的翻译众译作也是差别最大。
4、“Because it was grassy and wanted wear”（直译：因为它长满草想被踩），“我”选择了第二条路，就是因为这个原因。雪地总是诱人去踩，草地也是一样，特别是没人踩过的雪地和草地。作者: 曲径通幽 时间: 2012-6-1 10:48
