一江秋水译齐云《蓝色的梦》

齐云

The blue dream

In my dream the earth is
  a drop of tear
Lots of fish as people is
  swimming there

蓝色的梦

我梦见地球
是一滴泪水
无数的鱼儿
游在泪水里

齐云

In dream the earth’s
A drop of tear
And schools of fish
Were swimming there.

另一种译法，这是英文二步抑扬诗，与原诗格律最接近，惜乎不如一江秋水译诗自然。而且有人说了，In dream不通，必须In a dream或者In my dream

凤舞

我也觉得挺好。

齐云

对一江秋水的这个翻译很满意。谢谢！